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Friday, April 3, 2015

Prescribe Life

               Rolling red bottle
                       take me away
       Prescribed relief of pain
                      an empty vessel  
               Temporary remedy
         The doctor's duct tape
                       Every six hours
                 
                  not a minute more
                       The addiction
                 
    led me to this new affliction
                        Now questioning the finality of this rest
                         
                        Side effects
             
 taking my own life no longer the best
                          in this fight
       my mental vitality put to test
  So I vomit time to clean up this mess.


Alright I got some criticism that the story of awakening my characters desire to want to live was not properly/fully told.  

               Rolling red bottle
                       take me away
       Prescribed relief of pain
                      an empty vessel
               Temporary remedy
         The doctor's duct tape
                       Every six hours

                  not a minute more
                       The addiction

                           New affliction
                         No full nights rest

                          Side effects

  taking my own life the best
                           in this fight
        my mental vitality put to test
  So I vomit time to clean up this mess.
The message in this poem is the thought my character has when hitting bottom, deciding not to give up.

4 comments:

  1. I saw your message and enjoyed your acrostic George. Never give up!

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    1. Life is precious people must always have the strength to protect themselves from a moment of weakness.

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  2. Good felt emotion and message. All the best

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    1. Thank you Wayne. I appreciate your visit.

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